Thanks Tom. I appreciate your comments, and I'm pleased that you listen so closely. I'm conscious that I don't have much of a voice, and I'm not very confident about singing. There is not much power or range there, and I've noticed that I'm kind of deeper and hoarser since being on some medicine this last few weeks. I wrote this lyric about a year ago, and I've been trying to fit a tune to it. Overall I guess I'm fairly happy with how it turned out. I want my efforts to have a style that mixes different elements and don't sound too predictable or boring. Getting my lyrics to fit is my second biggest problem. - Ideally I'd like to find someone to sing for me! Thanks again : )
You quite skillfully merge different kinds of styles in this song. If I might offer a suggestion: it would have been nice if your vocals were a little higher in the mix near the beginning of the song -- I was trying to catch the lyrics but they were obscured by the music. Other than that one very minor critique, this is one of your strongest songs, Steve!