one of the short comings if you want to see it that way is that it is really easy to comment more than once on a song with out realizing it. so sorry if that is the case and i am repeating myself. great feel to this. so melancholy, on of my favorite feelings.
tim
i am thinking about words tonight
they can be hard as nails
they-can be as shapeless as water
they can break your heart
they can hang like a chain
hold you up for years
cause you to think twice
take away your fears
you are falling in love…
the phrase "on thatch, on leaves, on tin, on willow" is from the book "A House in Bali" by Colin McPhee
Originally for RPM '07 album.
It might drag on a bit long.
White Light was written in June along with 10 other "Off the cuff" tunes. Just before the great flood in Cedar Rapids, Iowa. Our house was flooded and slowly being rebuilt. This is 4th of the 10 to be recorded.
i saw the curtains changing color
i watched the sun room come alive
i have been sitting in this rocker
wondering when you might arrive
i am hoping for redemption
cant stand the way i feel
i know it is only passing through me
rivers flood…
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Mr Glu
I like your little ditty. I think it has a lot of promise.
The one thing that I believe it needs is a "B" part. You are basically playing the same chord progression over and over again. Not too bad since it's only 2:29 long but a B part would help. I don't know what key its in but lets just say its G. Your B part should be in some other rel chord starting in C or D and progress for 8 or so bars somewhere in the middle of the tune. Just to mix it up.
I hope this is what your looking for.
Recent Comments
well structured. great moody piece
one of the short comings if you want to see it that way is that it is really easy to comment more than once on a song with out realizing it. so sorry if that is the case and i am repeating myself. great feel to this. so melancholy, on of my favorite feelings. tim
this is surly your strongest style. well played. i can really hear david bromberg in there
those guitars are so 70;s. took mre back to a different place and time thanks tim
very smooth vocal processing. I want to know how to do that!
Okay...this is WAY TO EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!
Oh...I Love this track!
That was fun and impressive. Thanks for sharing it. Sometimes it's interesting to see where people came from.
I really enjoyed this album. Good to hear some other cool RPM stuff.
Really liking this. Great work!
This has got to be one of my favorite RPM albums ever. Keep up the good work!
Hey, I noticed you listened to my stuff. Thanks, I figured I'd check out some of your music as well. Great stuff, are you an RPM-er as well?
Man I love this album cover. Can't wait to get home and listen.
Did I comment on this before? I like it more now! Downloaded and faved.
This is a beauty Kavin! Thanks for turning me onto the DL4 also- just got one myself
great colab yawl! -KAC
Nice :)
Awesome track Kirk, you definitely captured some amazing sounds and I am jealous!
Very provocative track Tim, amazing song.
Mr Glu I like your little ditty. I think it has a lot of promise. The one thing that I believe it needs is a "B" part. You are basically playing the same chord progression over and over again. Not too bad since it's only 2:29 long but a B part would help. I don't know what key its in but lets just say its G. Your B part should be in some other rel chord starting in C or D and progress for 8 or so bars somewhere in the middle of the tune. Just to mix it up. I hope this is what your looking for.