The tension in this is palpable from the first question. The quiver in the voice. The nakedness of the questions. "Often forget you understand." Hard to hear as just another blues song.

cool soulful serenade

wow. this song is so cool and delivered in just the right style. hats off to you, andrew!

Fine song, fine, fine song. I love your slight country feeling here, really true sounding. This really works for me.

fun lyrics, Vox, cool tune!

Does for me..... a little light, a little dark.....

A little Purple sounding! Pretty FN cool.

lol - the bass was an organ set to "hammer house of horrors", perhaps I overdid it! (The reverb on the vox is deliberately "chilly" as well) I wanted stark and lonely in the verses. But I also wanted comfort in the choruses - which is what the other instrumentation was intended to bring... but I've given up on that idea... it now sounds to me like the singer is incapable of bringing the comfort he offers, and he knows it... so I'll leave it them both to it :) And nope, I didn't steal the teddy bear... But mine were removed from me and given to my sister when I was about 8 years old... so I do know exactly what I'm talking about lol

odh is right; the bass feels a little sinister. Did you steal the teddy bear, Andrew?

Something slightly unsettling. Which is a good thing. Could be the treatment on the bass. I like...

"I dream you every Day" Some tunes dont need a lot of stuff. Focused and moving

I'd agree with G. Connor: it already is a very nice song as is. And the relative nakedness of it fits the story pretty well.

I'm reaching that conclusion too :) If I'd held it back and put the parts on that I was rehearsing that day it would have been fine... and possibly better... But I was trying them out today, and they seem surplus to requirements now! (Mrs R has got her way lol)

I like it. Why fill it up with more than you need. I think you captured it perfectly.

Wow this is awesome! Thanks for the comments on my tracks.. theres more on soundcloud if you like :) https://soundcloud.com/peterdonaghey

Lovely melody (and you carry it very well). Though I can 'hear' some more instrumentation and harmonies, this 'naked' version is not so shamed to be that way.

I love this song!

Nice lyrics and great voice dude.Good stuff

Very nice... Like something in a musical. The voice doesn't sound like Freddy Mercury but has the dramatic tension...

Hello Andrew Thx for all the comments on my songs! sorry I havent shouted back sooner!! i do appreciate bro! this is a cool song! like the style Brian

It's like there are voices... and I can't quite reach out to hear them.

I'd forgotten what it was like listening to your pieces. Magical.

Wow

That's pretty powerful.

Wow. Haunting sounds.

I listened on Friday, and I've been trying to figure out what happened so fast... and then seeing jimgoodinmusic's comment "...reflective of the street", on this relisten I ended up stood there with the same "hey what happened?" ... but a passer-by said "I don't really know - it all happened so fast" ...

I hadn't realised Colleen was listening same time... I was off checking out Mary Oliver... but yes, after the initial scratchiness that I got used too, I agree, very quickly the cacophony did seem "normal" to me and even commonplace... and the poem Egrets (I had to look up what an Egret was, I didn't know! I knew the word, but not that it was a white bird) ... that kinda emphasised it... there was magical, but normal, and natural, stuff going on, and even the cacophony itself was natural - as in not necessarily man-made - the thorns and mosquitos...

I read the description and thought "ummmm, ok"... and, indeed, it did start like that for me. But then it was strangely compelling.

I was looking for a word to describe the feel... and Colleen's already got it - "slinky cool".

Very refreshing sound - but the heavy breathing reminds of someone... not sure it's Colleen though! lol

This is still making me tingle. Those first two lines... I want everyone to feel it.

I think I remember it? Mighty cool anyways. I'm kinda jealous, though - all my old ones aren't that easy to post here... they're all recorded on pieces of A4 paper, in the metaphorical "shoe-box" (actually, it's not not that metaphorical, it is a box, several actually, they've just never held any shoes)

Wow, yes. It's a gorgeous song.

I like both. This one sounds more summery though!

Sounds summery to me.... off to find the other one

I'm liking the kinda sparse but cluttered vibe I'm getting from this. Yep, dirty, that describes it well. And that ominous but bouncy synth motif... Yeah, nice one.

Summery - check, Duran Duran - check, Cow Bell- check, all present and correct :) Cool sounds. I was at university, in a rock/metal band, writing songs with titles like "Daughter Of The Pharoahs" ("You've got the looks of your motherrr... Stained with the blood of your brotherrrr") .... I liked Duran Duran, but the dudes I was with would not be convinced that "catchy" was a good thing... Funnily enough, I found a photo a while back - I was the only one who would have looked out of place in a Duran Duran photoshoot!!

I'm about to get called into a zoom meeting for work... I'll be back for the rest after

I've always imagined you younger than me. But if you were doing this in 77 (I was 14 and in a choir, and writing songs about Garden Gnomes), then obviously not! This is mighty cool stuff for back then... wow

Oh yes. I'm liking this big time. A: Sweet song. B: That guitar... whoa... Luther Perkins lives on...